新挑战TOEFL iBT作文满分--时代焦点英语学习丛书（轻松搞定托福作文，畅销十年，经典力作）

这本书是挺不错的，你可以看一下

【高分求批改作文】托福TPO12的独立写作。

首先声明一下： 真的写的不错，我绝对是鸡蛋里挑骨头。

若有不妥之处，请见谅啊 ：-）第一段第一行： …better than have broad knowledge… better than的比较对象是名词的形式所以后面改为having broad knowledge第二行： it can give people… give是口语化词汇，意思太多，建议写作不要用。

改为offer The most difficult 过于绝对化，建议把the most去掉第四行： like是口语化词汇，改为such as第二段第一行： make speople easier to change their jobs.. 这句话感觉也比较口语化，可以改为： …larger range of knowledge renders people the opportunities to adjust their career path when…第二行： find some areas are not promising… 正确用法： find sth + adj 所以改为find some areas unpromising第四行： 前面用过enough了，所以这里改为adequate Find some area's scope… some area前面出现过，为了保证用词多样性，改为certain domain's scope倒数第二行：又一次出现larger range of knowledge，可简洁的改为more know-how第三段第一行： benefit的通常用法是benefit sb， 或者 benefitsth. 建议改为：benefit people who work in interdisciplinary areas. 去掉了some， 因为这个词出现过几次第二行： 21th 改为 21st century第三行： 建议把interdisciplinary areas 改为 interdisciplinary talents 21世纪属于复合型人才可能更恰当一些第四行： merely knowledge 副词merely不能修饰名词knowledge，改为one with the mere knowledge of …第五行： …one owns broad knowledge of… own通常指拥有的物品，知识的话建议用“习得或掌握”改为one grasps / acquires the knowledge of…第六行：既然前面用了one，这里用he就不合适了。

为什么不是she呢？建议还是沿用oneInterdisciplinary 出现过很多次，不妨把这句话变成 could one work in various fields…第四段第一行： having alarge range of knowledge..出现过几次了，建议改为 wide scope of knowledge第五行：前面出现过thinking methods，这里可以用thinking patterns There is no thinking way could be perfect… 没有一种思维方式是完美的？语法有问题，有两个系动词is和 could be. 另外，这句话的表达比较中式，根据你后面的句意，这里建议改为： Since one way of thinking might cause myopia最后一行： consider a thing… thing建议不要在托福作文出现，因为意思太多，比较口语化。

你的最后一句话可以写： Since one way of thinking might cause myopia, considering as many perspectives as we can would be more beneficial.最后一段第一行： a broad range of knowledge… a narrow range of knowledge… 感觉有一些啰嗦，并且a… of knowledge 出现过几次了。

可以改为In a nutshell, erudition is much better than specializing in one area because…第三行： interdisciplinary 过于高频，改为diversified

ETS给出过新托福独立写作范文吗

有的！在ets出的官方指导上！但是！啊啊啊，纯粹是黑钱啊，那本书巨厚无比！价格与页数成正比。

不过话说回来，如果想要新托福拿高分，这个还是必须要买的。

里面所有题型都有介绍，还有音频资料和习题！这是非常关键的，因为新托福实际上就考两个东西：听力 和听力~！！！！推荐去买一本official guide， 就是新东方说的og，如果你报了新东方的托福班它应该会在教材里替你买。

还是那句话，想高分，老老实实做og吧，，，

求托福独立写作部分的万能例子

1.创新 Marcel Duchamp 先是 马塞尔 杜尚，这是现代艺术史中的传奇人物，创意百出，信马由缰，最出名的乱搞是在摊上买了一个尿池，命名为《泉》，拿到艺术馆展出。

杜尚家底十分殷实，是少有的走在时代尖端而不用忍受贫穷的艺术家。

他涉及的艺术领域极其广泛，可以看作近代艺术里的达芬奇。

他的例子几乎可以用到所有跟艺术相关的题目，其他类的部分题目也可以用（比如创新，outsider什么的—用来做补充：不需要是外来者，只要保持观念开放依然可以成就breakingthrough的achievement） 背景：French-born American artist (though he always denied being “an artist”) His works had a major impact to the direction of 20 century art. All his life, he changed the form of art as well as himself. He introduced the European movement Cubism（立体主义） and dada（达达主义） to United States, and was influential in surrealist（超现实主义，很有名的达利就是搞这个的） movement. 此外他还和installation art（装置艺术）， concept art（概念艺术）这些现在很火的艺术形式有关 泉的例子：Fountain, an ordinary, mass-produced urinal that has been transformed into a work of art simply by being exhibited in a gallery and receiving a new title. 他说过一句话，Art may be bad, good or indifferent, but, whatever adjective is used, we must call it art, and bad art is still art in the same way as a bad emotion is still an emotion. 可以用来扩展解释他思想的开放，同时把art和形容词换掉也是很好的 辨证类型的 GRE句子 2.现实对艺术的影响 Dada 前面说到的达达主义。

因为跟社会、战争联系很紧密，所以拿出来讲： DADA是一战以后欧洲的诗人画家搞的，因为战争的残酷让他们意识到之前的那些形而上的出世的艺术很没意义，有一部分就开始搞更没有意义的DADA（汗~~~事实就是这样Di） The slaughter of World War I affected artists in different ways. Some felt, as Mondrian did, that human betterment lay in the creation of an impersonal, mechanistic way of life. Still others concluded that the very idea of human betterment was a pointless illusion. For this group, the main lesson of the war, if anything, was the bankruptcy of reason, politics, technology, and even art itself. On this premise, several artists and poets founded a movement whose name, dada, was purposely meaningless, and whose members ridiculed anything having to do with culture, politics, or aesthetics 再补充一个现实跟艺术相连的，名气大一点，老朋友Picasso，不过是以作品为突破口，应该不会那么多雷同 Guernica（就是一副长的、上面都是牛头马面的画，Guernica是西班牙北部的小镇，德国人把那炸了，毕加索听到后悲愤丛生，就画了它） 《Guernica》 The painting's color scheme proved effective for conveying the cruel reality Spanish painter Picasso created the masterpiece when he heard of the bombing of Guernica during Spanish Civil War 3.另一些悲惨的艺术家 伦勃朗Rembrandt， 维梅尔Vermeer （荷兰黄金时期的两个大师，手法创新，在光影表现上都有独到之处。

都不受同时代人重视，很符合大家心目中艺术家的Stereotype，可以用来替换梵高、毕加索这类妇孺皆知的大佬） Rembrandt（艺术成就上比Vermeer高点） Rembrandt, Dutch baroque artist, who ranks as one of the greatest painters in the history of Western art. His work made an enormous impact on his contemporaries and influenced the style of many later artists. Perhaps no painter has ever equaled Rembrandt's chiaroscuro effects or his bold impasto. Vermeer（不知道大家看过《戴珍珠耳环的女孩》girl with a pearl earring吗，就是说他的，不过故事是假的，Vermeer的日子可能比电影里更惨） Jan Vermeer reputed the greatest painter besides Rembrandt in Dutch Golden Age, had a marvelous ability in expressing lights and shadow, but he died young left his family no legacy but deep debt. During his lifetime, he had not sold one piece of his paintings. After his death Vermeer did not receive attention until the late 19th century. His reputation steadily increased thereafter, and today he is considered one of the greatest Dutch painters. 4.跨专业的牛人 跨专业领域，outsider achievement的文章很适用 艺术》数学 M.C. Escher （艾舍尔，就是画图形渐变、现实中不存在的空间的画的人，很牛，也很神经质，他只上过中学，作品却很受数学家推崇。

） Dutch M.C Escher leaps from art to mathematics. Escher had no formal mathematical training beyond secondary school, but his fantastic print works, such as Escher Limit Cycle and Day and Night, are most greatly admired by mathematicians, who recognized his work an extraordinary visualization of mathematics principles, and considered him a part of them. 数学》艺术 分性艺术创始人，IBM研究院搞数学、物理的，...

托福独立写作部分举个人例子和名人例子哪个好？

你好。

综合写作记住这一点。

听力和阅读永远相反，我之前也是来不及记笔记，只能写得很虚，阅读怎么样，然后听力反驳。

这样就才24分。

你要做的是多听听力，并且要有时间将三个分论点的论据，也就是细节记下来，然后再根据自己的理解写出paraphrase，当然写一样也可以，不过你不可能记得那么全。

这个是硬伤，需要你自己练习。

听听力的时候，要注意听力肯定先说阅读是扯淡，然后开始三段话，每段话反对阅读的相对应段落。

你要听那种承上启下的词，这就说明这一段结束了，笔记上花条大横杠，开始记下一段的细节。

有什么问题请追问，祝120啦~...

准备考托福,写了一篇托福独立作文,求大神点评及打分！！！！

不可以的。

第一步：审题、确定立场、列出理由最少3分钟最多5分钟。

要避免两个极端：（（只需要在草稿纸上用英文单词或汉语列出各个理由，防止遗忘））用时太少，理由没有想清楚就开始写作，不仅造成文章逻辑结构不清，还会引起行文中频繁的修正，欲速则不达；用时太多，不要追求一次思考就能把每一条理由及相关例证都想出来。

其实想出两条之后就可以动笔，各个理由的例证可以写到该段时边思考边写。

这一点你不必怀疑，只要你的思维还是正常的，一定能做到。

第二步：正文写作。

最少22分钟最多26分钟。

a.各段写作时注意对段落的不同部分给予不同的重视。

主题句给予最大重视，注意炼句，别说你不想写主题句，主题句可以使读者和笔者本人更清晰该段落写什么。

各段中支持性细节写作不必遵循相同的模式。

有n种选择可供参考：1.举具体事例2.说对方相对缺点3.使用数据4.使用假想例子5.使用类比、比喻、引用等修辞手段来论述。

哪一种你最容易想出来，就用哪一种。

b.考前将文章开头、结尾、例证、让步等各种句套背熟练，并且练习和模考时把他们用熟，要象做完型填空一样对待考场作文。

小马过河提醒别试图在考场上再现去决定比如哪种开头好，怎样结尾好。

使用自己选种的套话。

c.当被告知还有5分钟结束时，一般你已经该写到最后一条理由，或者已经在做结尾。

要确保文章有结尾段。

（不排除将他和最后一条理由的末段结合在一起的可能性。

）...

国外学生如何遣词造句写托福作文

自2006年新托福在中国实行以来，其写作单项以综合和独立作文各一篇的考查形式，为传统的学术类写作增添了一点小清新范儿。

和老对手IELTS的写作相比，IBT Writing对中国考生而言，可谓是看似熟悉却又几分陌生，几多相似却又暗藏不同。

现就对新托福写作两篇作文测试的特点进行几点剖析：“独立写作”是典型的“四化”1.遣词造句常态化对于新托福独立写作的用词要求，一个很明显的倾向就是“准确常见”。

因为只有常见的词汇，才能最直观地让读者了解作者的思路，才能最直白地表达作者的所思所想。

以官方指南第三版中一篇满分作文的开头段为例：There are certain considerations or factors that everyone takes into account in a relationship. People may look for honesty, altruism, understanding, loyalty, being thoughtful etc! Everyone would more or less wish that the person she\he is dealing with has some of these virtues above. Putting them in an order according to their importance, however, can be very subjective and relative.上段并没有任何生僻词和句式磅礴的句子，但每个单句的意思都清晰直白，整段的行文也通顺流畅。

其实，用词的准确性很大程度上就看这个词的常见度，因为正是某个词能够准确直白地表明某个意思，这个词才会常用。

试想在现代中文写作中， 一个心智正常的中国人不会把“去洗手间”写成“出宫”，不会把“吃饭”换成“用膳”，因为“出宫”和“用膳”已经脱离了现代中国人的常态词汇表，因此就不能给人直白清晰的印象了。

这种用词的常态性还体现在新托福题目本身的用词上，请看一道2007.08.25的新托福教育类考题用词：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Schools should not pay much attention to general subjects. Instead, they should help students prepare for specific careers and jobs.而雅思剑桥7 P102中同一考题的出题用词是：Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What in your opinion should be the main function of a university？又来2009.05.30的新托福考题：Young school children (age five to ten) should be required to study art and music, in addition to math, language, science and history； 类似的一道雅思考题：Schools should teach children the academic subjects which have a relationship with their future careers, so other subjects like music and sports are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree？ 雅思考题只是笼统地说“subjects which have a relationship with their future careers”， 有些烤鸭们可能还会花时间去纠结到底哪些科目跟以后就业相关，而豁达的新托福考题不仅直接列出了科目的明细，还划定了children年龄的范围！再看一道纠结的广告类雅思考题：The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of the society where such products are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree？ 本道题大部分孩子估计都得读不下三遍才有头绪。

看看新托福怎么考“广告的作用VS消费者的决定权”这个点的： Advertisement is a waste of time and money, because customers already know what they want.(20071208) 由上可见，无论从对写作词汇的评判还是出题的词句选取，新托福写作无不体现出老美率真直白的语言个性。

2.话题范围生活化大打学术旗号的雅思考试会冷不丁地冒出“犯罪类”，“动物类”甚至“国际援助”相关的考题。

这些脚踩莲花头戴光环的“道义文明类”考题着实过于文艺范了点。

而IBT Writing出题范围却主要集中在探讨生活问题上。

有关于是否“子承父业”的：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose the jobs similar to their parents (20100106)；纠结是做“普通青年还是文艺青年”的：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to succeed, you should be more like others than be different from everyone else (20100207)； 探讨“要钱还是要命”的：A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time (20090227)； 是“保守还是奔放”的：People should take a secure job immediately when finding one instead of waiting for the job that they find more satisfying (20100612)； 八卦“富人高不高兴”的：People who do not have to work because they have enough money are barely happy(20071103).甚至还有更鸡零狗碎的新托福题目：“布置作业”的：Teacher should assign homework for students every day (20080427).这些考题看似非常琐碎， 但的确是地球人都会拉的家常，非常符合美国人重视在实践中求知，而不喜欢探究高深理论的个性。

显然，以生活实践作为分析对象，是新托福作文的一大特点，也折射...

托福作文怎么写才能拿高分？

首先呢你要把握好作文重要的因素就是论点和论证。

因为一篇好的作文，论点可以提纲挈领，论证可以丰富文章内容。

上考场前，你的脑袋中一定要装一些东西，好的例子，好的句子。

论据可以是一个短语，一个人名，或是一个完整的例子。

这种例子能够画龙点睛。

然后就是要把握好文章写作思路。

之后你应该审题，尤其关注作文题目中的绝对性词汇。

其次用20秒的时间，整理脑中所有能用的素材，让这些素材称为支持你段落的骨架，然后开始确定段落的论点。

尽量使你的语言句式丰富一些。

还有把握好过渡词的使用，和适当的论述方法完善你的作文，让他成为一个逻辑整体。

新托福独立作文的写作是讲究技巧的，只要把一篇作文的条理理顺，再用自己的语言组织论点和论据，丰富文章的内容，然后再稍加注意一下措辞...

托福写作高分范文：艺术家or科学家,孰轻孰重

Artists and scientists both make valuable contributions to our society. It may seem sometimes that artists are more valued. That's because those artists who are famous make a lot of money. However, they are relatively few. The fact is that scientists are more valued. They get more respect from society for the work they do.Artists reflect their times and their culture. A painter or a writer shows us in pictures and words what we're like as a people. They record our culture for future generations. Actors and other performers, like singers and dancers, entertain us. They take our minds off our troubles, and remind us how beautiful and exciting our imaginations can be. Artists also help keep their societies mentally and emotionally healthy. For example, children that participate in the arts, such as painting or music, in school do better in their other studies. Art of all types is necessary to the human spirit.The contributions scientists make to society are more obvious. They include the cars we drive, the computers we use at home and at work, and the appliances that help us cook our meals and clean our houses. All of these come from the ideas and hard work of scientists. Because of scientific discoveries, we're living longer and more healthful lives. Scientists also contribute to the arts. Movies are the result of science. So are television, radio, and the recording of music on CDs.Generally, scientists don't make as much money as famous artists like film stars, opera singers or successful painters. However, our society gives them more respect, and they generally make a good living. Scientists are considered to be serious professionals, while artists are sometimes viewed as flaky, irresponsible people. So overall, I'd have to conclude that we value scientists more.

托福写作高分范文赏析：为什么要上大学

范文Why People Attend College or University?There are many advantages to a college or university education. Students have ample opportunity to explore a variety of interests, increase both their general and specific knowledge, prepare for a chosen career and develop independence. All of these are valuable goals to achieve, but it is my belief that most students today pursue higher education insgroupsto prepare for their future careers.In the past, only the rich and privileged had the opportunity to attend a university and their goals were very different. Coming from wealthy families, few of them would have to compete for a job after graduation, and most wished only to be considered well-educated. Today's students are more practical. They must be able to compete in a very competitive job market; therefore, a practical education is very important. Furthermore, higher education is a big investment and so most students want to get all they can out of it. For these students, it is better to have clearly defined career and education goals rather than to try and find themselves in college. Of course, all students want to increase their knowledge, but I believe that most students today want that knowledge to be relevant to their future careers.The world has changed a great deal since universities were established. They are still wonderful places for acquiring broad knowledge and for personal development. However, in today's competitive world these pursuits must bebalanced with the pursuit of more specific goals. That is why I think most students view higher education as a valuable tool in career preparation.参考译文人们为什么要上大学？大学教育有很多优点。

大学生能有充分的机会去探索自己感兴趣的各种事物、增长一般与特定的知识、为自己所选定的职业生涯做准备，并培养独立的个性。

这些全都是值得追求的宝贵目标。

但是我认为，现今大多数的学生接受高等教育是为了要对未来的职业生涯做准备。

在过去，只有富人及特权阶级才有机会上大学，而且他们的目标相差悬殊。

因为他们出身于富有的家庭，所以毕业后很少有人必须要和别人竞争，以取得工作机会，大多数只是希望让别人觉得他们受过良好的教育。

现在的学生实际得多。

由于必须在竞争激烈的就业市场和别人竞争，因此，讲求实用价值的教育就变得很重要。

此外，高等教育是一项重大的投资，所以大多数的学生都会竭尽所能，想从中得到一切。

对这些学生而言，最好是有明确的职业和教育目标，而不是在大学中才试着自己去寻找。

当然，所有的学生都想要增长知识，但是我认为，现在大多数的学生都希望获得跟未来职业相关的知识。

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